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Now, keep in mind that I am writing as someone who has very little to no familiarity at all with poetry as an art form, so keep in mind I am unable to provide an in-depth criticism about your poem.

I do have a complaint with the use of the ampersand (&) at the line "gently covers her with a blanket." In my opinion, if you used a the word "and", it would be more effective, and would look natural.

I had to re-read it once, just to confirm that it's a father-daughter relationship, and it seems to be a beaufiul one, especially as the father's only desire is for his daughter to grow up in a safe, stable environment, but he knows that he is unable to do so, but he found hope and refuge in putting ink on paper, and hopes it would change the world for the better for his daughter.

It seems pretty heartwarming to me.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
The reason why I chose to use the ampersand is because And can sometimes make a poem feel...'stuffy' for lack of a better word, the ampersand is visually lighter and I found other poets use it to great effect, so I decided to borrow their technique as a good pirate should ^^ of course most of my pieces use the fully typed 'and' but in some situations the lighter ampersand is better :3

It actually wasn't a father daughter relationship, but I did leave it open to interpretation so I'm glad people found many ways to relate to it.

Thank you for enjoying this piece and I hope you'll check out more of my works :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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